Wow. This part actually made me feel chilly. And I like the cold :)
Clever you for making the top-of-the-train adventure scary instead of exciting, and for making me feel a pang or two of sympathy for Ann and Jack. Plus working in Siberian Tigers! Yaay!
Suggestions-
*Uncoupling one of the train cars. Maybe one of the arsehat brothers is in it? And then a tiger or Baba Yaga eats him :)
*ARTHUR's hand starts to do the alien-hand-syndrome thing, due to being so cold
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Date: 2011-04-08 05:55 am (UTC)Wow. This part actually made me feel chilly. And I like the cold :)
Clever you for making the top-of-the-train adventure scary instead of exciting, and for making me feel a pang or two of sympathy for Ann and Jack. Plus working in Siberian Tigers! Yaay!
Suggestions-
*Uncoupling one of the train cars. Maybe one of the arsehat brothers is in it? And then a tiger or Baba Yaga eats him :)
*ARTHUR's hand starts to do the alien-hand-syndrome thing, due to being so cold
*Heat- rather than cold- becomes a problem