This time it took me a lot of time to finally write a comment (or at keast it feels like that). Anyway, I relieved that Arthur is back in the train. I hate the cold as well, so reading about such freezing temperatures was almost painful, sometimes to vivid imagination isn't a good thing. Eames is great in this chapter, but what is the thing I like the most is Ann and Jack. I like the way you described them as damaged because of Dream sharing bussines: normal people, who lost their senses thanks to Dreams. I can't say I like them, it would be somehow strange anyway, but still the scene that took place between them is heartbreaking, especially because of Eames's inner comments; it gives a wider look at them, who they were, and who they are now. Another thing I both love and hate is the fact Eames is sure Arthur doesn't trust him. I can't say it's strange- knowing Arthur he shouldn't trust a person, who messed up his mind and tried to strangle him. The problem is Arthur is no longer sensible, when it comes to Eames and I truly believe that when he cuddles to Eames it's not only because of surviving. It couldn't be any other person beside him, only Eames. So yeah, the drama insues and I've got this feelings that this story can't end on leaving the train, because the scars of what happened won't dissapear so quickly. Coming back to Ann: it's one of the most interesting characters in this story. She also seems to be less damaged than Jack. I'm definitely waiting for her interaction with miracously saved Arthur. On the end of this comment I'd like to say something not strictly connected with this particular chapter, rather you stories in general. I mean, of course they're descibed as fanfictions, but I'm not sure if they're really still fanfictions. You're using ideas from the movie but the whole develompent of characters, the whole Dream sharing world go much further than usually in stories like that. It feels more like your own creation right now. And all this original characters: I've never seen in any fic so many OC, who would be so wondrefully written, so alive. And there's so many of them. Ok, all in all: just keep writing.
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Date: 2011-04-09 12:42 pm (UTC)Anyway, I relieved that Arthur is back in the train. I hate the cold as well, so reading about such freezing temperatures was almost painful, sometimes to vivid imagination isn't a good thing. Eames is great in this chapter, but what is the thing I like the most is Ann and Jack. I like the way you described them as damaged because of Dream sharing bussines: normal people, who lost their senses thanks to Dreams. I can't say I like them, it would be somehow strange anyway, but still the scene that took place between them is heartbreaking, especially because of Eames's inner comments; it gives a wider look at them, who they were, and who they are now. Another thing I both love and hate is the fact Eames is sure Arthur doesn't trust him. I can't say it's strange- knowing Arthur he shouldn't trust a person, who messed up his mind and tried to strangle him. The problem is Arthur is no longer sensible, when it comes to Eames and I truly believe that when he cuddles to Eames it's not only because of surviving. It couldn't be any other person beside him, only Eames. So yeah, the drama insues and I've got this feelings that this story can't end on leaving the train, because the scars of what happened won't dissapear so quickly. Coming back to Ann: it's one of the most interesting characters in this story. She also seems to be less damaged than Jack. I'm definitely waiting for her interaction with miracously saved Arthur.
On the end of this comment I'd like to say something not strictly connected with this particular chapter, rather you stories in general. I mean, of course they're descibed as fanfictions, but I'm not sure if they're really still fanfictions. You're using ideas from the movie but the whole develompent of characters, the whole Dream sharing world go much further than usually in stories like that. It feels more like your own creation right now. And all this original characters: I've never seen in any fic so many OC, who would be so wondrefully written, so alive. And there's so many of them.
Ok, all in all: just keep writing.