This line: It confirmed something that Arthur had already suspected over the last three or so years: there was no one else for either of them.

I could write boatloads of fic based off of that! So brilliant!

I was near tears at the end-that never happens when I read fic! So bravo to you. *tips hat*

I keep thinking about this fic and IDK I think it would be interesting if the train "gets lost".

I don't know if you've seen "The Darjeeling Limited" but there's these quotes that I keep thinking of when I think of your fic: "He said the train is lost."
"How can a train be lost? It's on rails."

Maybe they get lost but really its just someone messing with/ransacking the train? Maybe outside forces or maybe Dinclusin or someone on the train.

I dont know if you can do anything with that or not.

I like the idea that Michelle really isn't who she seems. There's something more to our Pokemon lovin' friend.

I love the idea that they are going to extract from Dinclusin. YES! That needs to happen. I think they need to do the same or find out more information about this Ann Dromalius chick. Maybe she's the one pulling the strings and Dinclusin is just the "point man" gathering information?

I think when they go under there's going to be something about Eames or Eames' past that comes out that maybe shocks Arthur and Eames. They keep saying that there aren't any secrets between them or that they know everything but I kind of want the opposite to happen like someone uncovers something.

Maybe a little more action happening? Like a chase, shootout, debate, argument, someone throws a table or chair over after a game is lost or accusations being thrown around.

I feel a little stuck as well as far as ideas. Sorry, BB. I'll try to think of more.